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Marcel Harmon's avatar

Wonderful. The format itself added to my anxiety as I read it, conveying a feeling of ideas presented too fast, like I could barely keep up, like I wasn't fully in control of how fast the words were coming at me.

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

What great feedback! Thank you for that... some people do not prefer that prose-ish form so I always wonder, but I started it in a more traditional way and it didn't seem to have the rush needed, so glad that worked for you!

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Diane Porter's avatar

Perceptive comment!

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Cynthia Turner's avatar

Wow! Made my heart race.

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Thank you for the comment, Cynthia.

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Karen Swalwell's avatar

Well done Suzanna!

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Thank you for the comment, karen! I will tell you about the impetus sometime.

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Kent Zimmerman's avatar

👍

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Thank you, Kent!

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Beth Hoffman's avatar

Love it

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Thanks, Beth! I could have included post hole diggers and chicken wire on that list, haha.

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Beth Hoffman's avatar

Oh I could come up with a great list! But I love the way you mixed them up so that many different aspects of our lives were in juxtaposition, and that the end result is that they make us who we are.

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peg lonnquist's avatar

so perfect. thought-provoking. unique. every time. amazing you are.

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Amazing YOU are. Thank you for the comments. I'll tell you about the impetus and you'll laugh.

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Susan Yinger's avatar

You are speaking to me. I am reading and rereading this again and again.

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Thank you so much, Susan. I am so glad this is poem is speaking to you.

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Kathi Zimpleman's avatar

You have done it again, Suzanna. Your words are powerful, beautiful, compelling, and comforting. Thank you.

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Suzanna de Baca's avatar

Thank you, Kathi. I always appreciate your comments.

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Heide Exner Larson's avatar

Can so relate! On the edge of succumbing but managing to stay afloat because being alive requires it. Love the reference to pools of tranquility and sunrise. Marcus Aurelius would love this!

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